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Crappy Poerty.

Post by LostShadowSoul on 2/5/2011, 8:38 pm

Um...my poerty sucks, but...yeah. Most of them are free verse, but I think I have a haiku in there. Anyway, Enjoy:

Sleepless nights
and
restless days.
Hooded cloak,
black abyss.
silent sobs,
a breathless scream.
Drowning fear
piercing eyes,
bloody red,
burnt and dead.
Beyond words
cannot describe.
Sweet,
nauseating,
hot sticky smell.
Under covers,
shaking, crying.
Nightmare dreams,
Demon,
and lies.
Must find truth,
where ever it
hides.



Careless loving
child
Willing and free,
Innocent mind yet not
Poisoned
by suffering loss of he.
Smile now,
but will you not?
When waves cry
and
sails howl.
Ashes fly like
broken dreams,
above
water so pure-
It drowns in me.



Blood curdling screech
Cracking thunders roar through dark
No corpse was ever found.



Whispers-
dark, deep, and gurgled.
Peace forever,
the eternal slumber.
Guardians of the dead,
silver eyes,
hazel,
and red.
Let me be the one
to tell the tale of the dead.



And there you have it-my crappy poetry.




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Post by EllaMila1 on 2/6/2011, 2:53 pm

Pfffffft crappy?

I think they're really deep. <3
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Post by LostShadowSoul on 2/6/2011, 4:44 pm

Most people cover their ears or through the book to the floor-thinking that I'm some kind of satanic spawn.

Thanks-but the only problem is that rhyme scheme and rythme patterns are a problem for me.

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Post by SnowFallsSlow on 2/6/2011, 9:49 pm

Rhyme scheme and rhyme patterns and your lack thereof or difficulty with them are hardly a problem. You write free verse poetry, instead of formalized poetry, which is, if you'll excuse the expression, just different.

That said, I do like it.

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Post by LostShadowSoul on 2/8/2011, 9:25 pm

Thank you, I take it their youre also a writer?

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Post by SnowFallsSlow on 2/13/2011, 11:09 pm

Aspiring, but yes. I deal more in fictionalized prose than poetry, but I do more than my fair share of dabbling. I tend to dabble enough to be able to express an opinion.

Besides, I tend to rhyme my poetry and have ridgid syllable counts; I lean to the formalized side of the spectrum, as evidenced here.

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Post by *Ukane* on 7/20/2011, 1:28 pm

I don't think it's crappy at all you should try writing more free-verse poetry. ^^

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