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Post by Dairadium on 6/9/2009, 3:21 pm

If you're wondering that's the title for my fanfiction (the name of this topic). I'm trying to become a novelist and I thought what better way to start then to write some fanfics. It's going to have multiple chapters and possibly a pairing (but don't get your hopes up). The story is a cross between John Carpenters 'The Thing' and Teen Titans (well no duh. XD) so it's a horror fic.
I'm putting it all up on my fanfiction account so I'll put the link down below, hope you all like it! :D (please review it if you get the chance, I'd really appreciate it.)

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5115653/1/No_one_to_trust_but_me
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Post by ultimateravenfan on 6/9/2009, 8:23 pm

Dairadium wrote:If you're wondering that's the title for my fanfiction (the name of this topic). I'm trying to become a novelist and I thought what better way to start then to write some fanfics. It's going to have multiple chapters and possibly a pairing (but don't get your hopes up). The story is a cross between John Carpenters 'The Thing' and Teen Titans (well no duh. XD) so it's a horror fic.
I'm putting it all up on my fanfiction account so I'll put the link down below, hope you all like it! :D (please review it if you get the chance, I'd really appreciate it.)

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5115653/1/No_one_to_trust_but_me

Sounds intresting
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Post by Starfire_02 on 10/5/2009, 8:36 pm

Dairadium wrote:If you're wondering that's the title for my fanfiction (the name of this topic). I'm trying to become a novelist and I thought what better way to start then to write some fanfics. It's going to have multiple chapters and possibly a pairing (but don't get your hopes up). The story is a cross between John Carpenters 'The Thing' and Teen Titans (well no duh. XD) so it's a horror fic.
I'm putting it all up on my fanfiction account so I'll put the link down below, hope you all like it! :D (please review it if you get the chance, I'd really appreciate it.)

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5115653/1/No_one_to_trust_but_me

please write more!! I really liked it!
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Re: No one to trust but me

Post by Dairadium on 10/5/2009, 11:59 pm

aetitan414 wrote:
Dairadium wrote:If you're wondering that's the title for my fanfiction (the name of this topic). I'm trying to become a novelist and I thought what better way to start then to write some fanfics. It's going to have multiple chapters and possibly a pairing (but don't get your hopes up). The story is a cross between John Carpenters 'The Thing' and Teen Titans (well no duh. XD) so it's a horror fic.
I'm putting it all up on my fanfiction account so I'll put the link down below, hope you all like it! :D (please review it if you get the chance, I'd really appreciate it.)

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5115653/1/No_one_to_trust_but_me

please write more!! I really liked it!

I'm writing the next chapter only it's taking me awhile (sort of got writers block). Can't say when it'll be done, but I'll update this when the next chapter is up.
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Post by Starfire_02 on 10/6/2009, 1:08 am

Dairadium wrote:
aetitan414 wrote:
Dairadium wrote:If you're wondering that's the title for my fanfiction (the name of this topic). I'm trying to become a novelist and I thought what better way to start then to write some fanfics. It's going to have multiple chapters and possibly a pairing (but don't get your hopes up). The story is a cross between John Carpenters 'The Thing' and Teen Titans (well no duh. XD) so it's a horror fic.
I'm putting it all up on my fanfiction account so I'll put the link down below, hope you all like it! :D (please review it if you get the chance, I'd really appreciate it.)

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5115653/1/No_one_to_trust_but_me

please write more!! I really liked it!

I'm writing the next chapter only it's taking me awhile (sort of got writers block). Can't say when it'll be done, but I'll update this when the next chapter is up.

Okay Im exited!
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Re: No one to trust but me

Post by Cylor on 10/6/2009, 8:48 am

I posted a review, but I'll also repeat what I said in it here, if you or anyone else wants to discuss that further.
Well, uh...The Thing is one of my all-time favorite movies, so I like the concept here, but...to be perfectly honest, your writing style really needs a lot of work. There are grammatical, phrasing and structural problems with virtually every sentence. The Titans' dialogue and behavior are also not very in-character. Finally, the sudden and seemingly accidental shift to bold type partway through is an eyesore.

The most useful advice I could give you, if you're serious about improving your writing, is to first do a lot more reading -- find others whose writing style appeals to you, and study their work.

And after that, proofread your own material thoroughly before posting it.

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Post by Dairadium on 10/6/2009, 2:00 pm

Cylor wrote:I posted a review, but I'll also repeat what I said in it here, if you or anyone else wants to discuss that further.
Well, uh...The Thing is one of my all-time favorite movies, so I like the concept here, but...to be perfectly honest, your writing style really needs a lot of work. There are grammatical, phrasing and structural problems with virtually every sentence. The Titans' dialogue and behavior are also not very in-character. Finally, the sudden and seemingly accidental shift to bold type partway through is an eyesore.

The most useful advice I could give you, if you're serious about improving your writing, is to first do a lot more reading -- find others whose writing style appeals to you, and study their work.

And after that, proofread your own material thoroughly before posting it.

Well I didn't notice the bold type so I'm sorry about that. ^^;
And I know my writing needs work I've been told that by some of my trusted friends. But also this is my first attempt at any kind of fan fiction so of course the dialog isn't going to be wonderful. If you'd have read at the bottom of the fic I even state all of this and what you said because honestly I see my faults, but nobody gets better without practice.

But thanks for reading it and posting a review, even if you had nothing good to say about it.
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Post by Cylor on 10/6/2009, 2:44 pm

Dairadium wrote:But thanks for reading it and posting a review, even if you had nothing good to say about it.
Well, look at it this way: I realize it's your first attempt, and if I thought your ideas and writing style showed no potential at all, I wouldn't have bothered reviewing. Wink I'm curious to see what you could accomplish in time.

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Re: No one to trust but me

Post by Dairadium on 10/6/2009, 3:34 pm

Cylor wrote:
Dairadium wrote:But thanks for reading it and posting a review, even if you had nothing good to say about it.
Well, look at it this way: I realize it's your first attempt, and if I thought your ideas and writing style showed no potential at all, I wouldn't have bothered reviewing. Wink I'm curious to see what you could accomplish in time.

lol that's true (I deserve a hit on the head for being rude. XD) and getting good criticism is better than bad I guess.
Anyways like I said I am writing the next chapter but it's taking a lot of time to write and that's probably for the best. =)
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